Put your main point first

Restructure the draft below so the reader gets the main point first. 1. Work out the single conclusion or request the draft builds to, and state it in one or two sentences at the top, written for [Reader]. 2. Group the supporting points under it, strongest first, so each group backs up the conclusion. 3. Cut anything that doesn't support the conclusion, and list what you cut at the end so I can check it. 4. Keep my wording where it works. Change the structure first, and the sentences only where the new order needs it. If the draft argues for more than one conclusion, say so first, then lead with the one that matters most to that reader. Draft: